[Report This]Date: October 23, 2008 8:13 am Title: Chapter 2
I think I would shoot Shawn if he abused me like he does Gus. I love that Tom thinks Shawn is Jerry and still believes that enen though he has never seen him there. This is great!
Author's Response: I've thought about that before--what would I do if I had a friend like Shawn? (WWGD--what would Gus do)--and yes, shooting him has often come up on the table as on option. And Tom is the best kind of doofus to write. Thanks!
Date: October 19, 2008 9:45 pm Title: Chapter 2
Poor sick Shawn. :( Great chapter!
Author's Response: He is way too much fun to put through the ringer.
Date: October 19, 2008 11:09 am Title: Chapter 2
Wow - I know I've said it before, but you are so amazingly detailed! I love how you've brought things in from the previous episodes with Gus's work - fits very well together. And the interaction among the characters continues to be right on. Can't wait to see what happens!
Favorite lines: If Gus had had bangs he would have looked up at Shawn through them.
"Conducting, you say! Can I be in the trumpet section? Oh, oh! Give me a solo!"
"I wouldn't feed you anything but to a piranha."
Author's Response:
*GRIN MADE OF ENORMITY*
I can stand to hear it, believe me. Thank you! I try to write scenes so that you can actually see them, and it means that I end up having to pack in a crap load of detail. I'm always afraid I'm going to overtip the balance, and either end up with a story swallowed in details or barely scraping by with bare skin dialogue.
And sweet! I love to hear lines that people like. It gives me warm fuzzies, and reminds me why I like to do this so much *grins*
[Report This]Date: October 18, 2008 11:10 pm Title: Chapter 2
Aw, poor Shawn.. No one believes he's sick. And poor, poor Gus. He's not gonna get this promotion, is he? :(
Author's Response:
Hahaha, certainly not for lack of trying. I laugh, because I control the wretched soul's destiny, and I'm not a very good pick for guardian angel of the year.
*smile and wave* I hope you're enjoying it regardless. Thanks so much for taking the time to comment! It means a lot :]
[Report This]Date: October 18, 2008 11:01 pm Title: Chapter 2
This might very well be my favorite episode for this season. I'm starting to get really worried about Shawn though (yes, I am ignoreing the fact that I wanted him sick in the first place). Poor Gus as well. All the stress he had to deal with when they were in the station. I can't wait for the next chapter. Your stories always suck me right in.
Author's Response:
Thank you! This VS has been a lot of insanely late-nights and just-missing-deadlines for me, but a lot of fun as well. Everyone has put so much work into it, and I'm glad to see we're able to make a few people smile with it! :)
Hahahaha, no point in not worrying about the poor guy, even if you did want him in that position. *Realizes that sounded kind of dirty, shrugs, moves on* I love me some whump, and even better I love hearing that I've made someone worry about him *grins* And poor Gus, everyone's out to make his life miserable.
Thanks, as always, for your reviews!
Date: October 18, 2008 5:05 pm Title: Chapter 2
This reads so well, I love it to pieces. I think my favourite bit was Shawn cutting himself off to call Gus (awww! speed dial 1!!) I also loved Shawn's words to Lassie: "It's okay if you liked it." LOL. Man, that's so Shawn.
Awesome stuff all around. Keep going, please!!
Author's Response:
You and everyone else have been completely making my day. I was afraid that the Gus and Shawn interaction wasn't coming across quite psych-like, or quite as naturally as it does on the show (I don't make nearly as many 80s references, sadly, but they're in a pain in the rear to come up with, which I suppose should be no excuse :] ). Hahahahaha, I laughed so hard when I put poor Lassie in Shawn's lap. No point in not traumatizing the guy every other day or so, right?
Thank you! Next chapter up on Tuesday!
Date: October 18, 2008 3:37 pm Title: Chapter 2
This is great!! Poor Shawn =P Poor Gus! I can't wait to read what happens next!
Author's Response:
Hahahaha, I can't help but make everyone's lives miserable, who have the misfortune of becoming the focus of one of my fanfictions. I'm so glad I'm not the only one to appreciate it! *toothy smile*
Thanks!
[Report This]Date: October 18, 2008 3:27 pm Title: Chapter 2
Gus smacked Shawn on the elbow, because it was the only body part he could reach without moving.
Shawn's "owch" face surfaced for a second, and disappeared. "Right. I'll remember that. My name is Shawn Spencer, psychic consultant with the police and currently extremely sick but working through my pain" here he got another smack to the elbow "and this is my associate, Bartholomew "Quite Contrary" Mary, of mother goose fame."
The PA looked like he wasn't sure if he should smile. "I'm pretty sure I have him written down as Burton Guster."
"His friends call him Bartholomew," Shawn assured him.
"My friends call me Gus," the pharmaceutical salesman amended with a tight smile.
That whole exchange was hilarous, I gotta tell you! Once more you've made a deelpy entertaining chapter- and layered in another delicious level of mystery besides! There were so many moments I adored! The exchange with Tom in the doorway was adorable! I love that you brought him back! And the whole Gus in the closet scene was absolute gold! I also loved the interrogation of "Bobble" (LOL). And, of course, Shawn's continuous illness (with Jules at the vending machine- HOW CUTE WAS THAT!?)
Yup, I love it all!
Author's Response:
Awesome! Your reviews always make me grin, dragonnan. I love knowing what's made people laugh, or at least smile--makes it all worth it! I'm glad you're liking the mystery in it--I'm sort of afraid I keep missing it while trying to just write psych interactions, and it's great to hear that at least it seems to be going in some direction :).
I love Tom! I've loved him since he showed up in season 1, and I've missed the poor guy, so he gets a little bit of fanfiction love here. That, and the fact that it makes Gus's life more miserable, trying to balance Shawn with Jerry *grins at poor Gus's predicament*
I have no idea where that vending machine scene came from. It wasn't in my story notes at all, and I was blasting away with my fingers at the keyboard, following along pretty well, when Juliet suddenly showed up with a few extra quarters and a little bit of sympathy for our poor hero.
Thanks! *grins*