Date: February 07, 2009 4:28 pm Title: Chapter 4
This was really good!
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it. :)
Date: November 22, 2008 4:32 pm Title: Chapter 4
Sooo Good!! The whole stranger danger bit was hiliarious! I love how shawn's puppet was Lassie!!! Shawn was Brilliant!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Glad it was entertaining. :)
Date: November 16, 2008 6:27 pm Title: Chapter 4
So it took me awhile to finish all these chapters, but I have now finished your story. I think you did a great job, I think you maintained the integrity of the show and did some nice tie-ins from the other virtual episodes and to the actual show. I also think you did a fantastic job of creating a fitting flashback to match the rest of the story, it definitely tied in well together.
The only thing is at times I felt Carleton complained a little too much in the beginning, but I do felt that as the story progressed you returned to his gruff demeanor.
Keep up the good work with your other stories. :)
Author's Response:
Thanks so much, I'll be sure to keep an eye on Carlton next time, but you know how these guys like to take control and run their own ways sometimes... *sigh* crazy guys.
I'm glad you caught and enjoyed all the throw backs to the other episodes (of VS and show), I was worried some of them might be too subtle.
Thanks!
[Report This]Date: November 12, 2008 3:57 pm Title: Chapter 4
*faints* Why are these so long
They are amazing but kinda hard to fit in the 15min chinks i have for fanfic
Oh great and now you amazing lot, have already posted another one, while i was still struggling to read this one
okay, so i am off to go read the next one
And you should take the above as a compliment, even if it doesn't sound complimentary.
*pretend to run off to next one, but in actual fact drerially opens up Textbook and gets back to what she should be doing*
Author's Response:
haha, i'm sorry they are so long, but more bang for your buck right? or for....free.
Thanks so much, I know you tried to hide that compliment, but I got it. :)
Date: November 11, 2008 11:54 pm Title: Chapter 4
I loved this so much. Great episode, so enjoyable!
“Wha’s naw mine?”
I LOL'd.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. :D
Date: November 09, 2008 9:45 pm Title: Chapter 4
Sorry to take so long to review, Sky!! THIS WAS GREAT! Fabulous wrap-up, inventive way for Shawn to do the reveal, action everywhere - and Shawn worried about the kids. I love it! You had some fantastic quips throughout as well - I think I was laughing pretty much the whole time! Great job!
Love this line: “How dare you assume that just because they’re dead they don’t have dietary needs! That’s spirit racism." And this one: "He could feel hands on his body maneuvering him to what he vaguely seemed to remember was called a supine position."
Author's Response:
Gee Mo, you take Soooo long, I can't believe you. :p
I'm glad you like the Spirit Racism bit, it made me giggle a lot while writing it. So it's fun to know someone else loved it as much as I did.
Thanks so much, I'm glad you like it Mo!
Date: November 09, 2008 9:21 pm Title: Chapter 4
Excellent work, my dear! Thank you for all your hard work on this story. I've looked forward to each and every update. And this line....
He groaned, bringing his hand up to rub his face. Only to recoil in surprise when instead of meeting his hand his face was ambushed by a fuzzy dog puppet.
HA! That was just too adorable...lol:) Great job!
Author's Response:
Thanks Syd! Its nice to have you guys around to appreciate the work that we put in. And I wasn't alone in the work, believe me.
Glad you liked the puppy puppet attack. Thanks again Syd. :)
[Report This]Date: November 09, 2008 1:41 am Title: Chapter 4
This was just a spectacular story! You've made it fun to read, and laid out the pacing just like a screen episode. I love to pieces the side story with Lassiter and Juiet, and I DIED in the previous chapter with the whole stakeout scene with Shawn and Gus- that was just brilliant!!
There is so much that was great- the whump, the Henry talk at the end, the Gus going alone to see his brother and Shawn can't (and he's bugged by that big time) and just all the fabulousness!
Love it!
Author's Response:
Awww, thanks Drag!
I love when humor kills people, I know, I know, it's morbid...but what can I say? Other than your death has made my evening. Thanks. :D
[Report This]Date: November 08, 2008 2:43 pm Title: Chapter 4
I finally caught up, yay! Now that it's completed, I gotta say it really felt like an episode of the show - the characters were spot-on, it had hilarious lines, the mystery was really interesting (and you managed to keep the suspense 'til the end) and you're great with the descriptions as well.
Thank you for writing such a perfect story, I've really enjoyed it. =)
Author's Response:
I'm not going to lie, descriptions are where I have the least luck. And well, I had to get a lot of help with that area so I can't take full credit for that.
I'm so glad you liked it and the fact that you think everything matched so well means soo much to me. There are times when i'm not sure but to hear it backed up makes me feel good.
Thank you RP, you make me all sorts of blush right now at your words. Seriously. Thanks again. :D
Date: November 08, 2008 4:30 am Title: Chapter 4
Oooh, great wrap-up. And now I'm curious about Gus. Will you people never give me any answers? *lol*
Author's Response:
Answers? What are those? :p
You'll get answers, eventually.
Glad you enjoyed it. :D