Date: April 09, 2009 5:32 pm Title: Saturday
Great chappy!
"Come on Gus, don't be a cheerless Cheerio!" LOL That is my favorite "Don't be a ..." line. :D
I also like the part that Shawn had to go to Jules and hum the song in her ear. Aww, that was too cute! <3
Date: January 01, 2009 4:46 pm Title: Saturday
LOL! I loved Shawn getting distracted at the drive-thru and missing the last clue! Poor Gus - he doesn't need that kind of stress:)
I am really curious about all the little mysteries surrounding this story. Who is El Mysterio, really? I love the radio clue and wondering how it ties in with everything else. Who will win the $100,000. The only thing keeping me grounded is knowing an update is very, very soon!
I can't wait because I have to know how this ends!!
Author's Response: Lol, and you *will* know by tomorrow, so no worries there :D Thanks a lot for the great review, it's good to know that you're enjoying this story and like the mystery so far.
Date: December 30, 2008 11:12 pm Title: Saturday
New member/lurker here! I just read all of the VS stories (and loved them!) and now I'm sitting here, waiting impatiently for every new chapter to be posted. You definitely are delivering some great stuff, so clearly my interest is being rewarded.
I've been puzzling over the mysteries in this story and I haven't been able to make heads or tails of them. My best guess with the scavenger hunt is that there are some hidden clues being dropped by the radio station before the "official" clue, but I didn't notice anything jumping out at me (clearly I'll have to go re-read it :P).
And what's up with Walsh? He's a sketchy character, but I can't figure out how or why. I mean, what's up with his hands? I do like that Juliet is clearly doing the deep thinking on this case, though. It's nice to see her take the lead as a detective (even if Lassie doesn't necessarily realize it yet ;).
I'm definitely looking forward to the rest of this story! And more fantastic tales from the Virtual Season, of course. :-D
Author's Response:
Then first of all, welcome! I'm glad you're enjoying the VS so far, it's really been a huge effort to put this together, but it was also a lot of fun.
Of course I'm not going to comment on your guesses (I'm evil like that, lol), but really, thanks so much for the great review. It was fantastic to read this first thing after waking up, I'm really glad you're enjoying this so much. And there will be two more stories in the VS after that for you to wait for, and I can already tell you that its going to be a blast :D
Thanks for the great review!
[Report This]Date: December 30, 2008 7:53 pm Title: Saturday
Why did we keep all those Spanish names and landmarks, but got rid of a perfectly good tradition like the siesta?"
Dude, I could not agree with you more!
And despite his clumsiness and the occasional moment when Buzz McNab didn't come across as the brightest bulb, there were those moments when it shone through why he became a cop.
Buzz is such an underused character. I'm so glad you've given him this much screen time! I really want to see his personality explored more- something that highlights his skills and gives us an insight into the layers he surely possesses. Plus, who wouldn't want more of his cuteness!
"Come on Gus, don't be a cheerless Cheerio!"
ROFL!!
"Sorry about that. I have this thing with my equilibrium, it's an old war injury."
Walsh raised his eyebrows. "Desert Storm?"
"Space Invaders. I once spent an entire weekend in the arcade, playing up to level 120. Permanently damaged my right wrist and my sense of balance, but I still hold the high-score down at the Pier Arcade. Totally worth it."
Okay, that whole segment was hilarious! It's so awesomely Psychish that I want to see the clip on screen lol! Actually, I'd love to see all of the as an episode because it truly rocks fabulously! Also, as a side note, the reference to Sassy made me grin and metephorically bounce up and down in my chair! (metephorical as I was still at work and needing to maintain an air of propriety lol!)
The humming scene with Juliet was wonderful! Seriously, it made me a bit melty... like a cheesy Gordita!
I love the clues! All the little pieces are starting to come together, and I'm very excited to see it all play out! I can tell you've put a great deal of attention into making this just right! You've done an amazing job!
Author's Response:
Lol, I'd have loved to see that metaphorical bouncing :D Just to know what metaphorical bouncing looks like. There might be another reference to Sassy later in the story, towards the end...
I'm seriously glad you like the humming scene - it was a little awkward for me to write anything remotely Shulesy. In fact, that scene wasn't in for a long time, but I needed Shawn to figure out the clue somehow, lol :D And in the end I thought it fit rather well as a Psych-like Shawn and Jules scene. Glad I wasn't too wrong with that.
Thanks so much for the great review dragonann :D