[Report This]Date: July 31, 2009 7:24 pm Title: Gunshot
I concur that there should be a follow-up chapter to this story. Nice use of suspense, very well-written, and everyone is in character. This is a wonderful story, especially for your first PsychFic. I also see that it is so far your only one. My question: Why? When you write this well, you should keep going.
I would love to see a follow-up chapter. I feel it needs resolution, that right now it is incomplete as-is. Don't be scared to hit us with more, you're a good writer!
I'm tagging a 10 in this one. Slap it on a biscuit...
Texasartchick
[Report This]Date: February 07, 2009 3:56 pm Title: Gunshot
You had my attention the whole time. Great job, especially for a first fic. :)
But.......WHAT HAPPENED TO SHAWN?????!!!!! More please.
Date: February 01, 2009 1:01 am Title: Gunshot
WSelcome to psychfic and the world of authoring!
Date: February 01, 2009 1:00 am Title: Gunshot
Poor Shawn! This is good!
Date: January 31, 2009 8:11 pm Title: Gunshot
What do you mean completed? No that is not completed! Does he live? Does he die? Can Lassie punch the shooter once more without IA getting on his case? Will Gus feel guilty for putting a sales meeting (it is where he might be) over working the case with Shawn? What will Henry say? Is Madeline around? Will Karen feel guilty? Can Buzz accidently bang the suspect's head when transfering him?
Inquiring minds want to know.
[Report This]Date: January 31, 2009 6:51 pm Title: Gunshot
SO, MANY, COMMAS,,,,,
Date: January 31, 2009 6:07 pm Title: Gunshot
Good work for your first fic. I like that you included everyone's perspective for the same incident. That was interesting. I also liked how you included humor from Shawn's POV. A lot of times, in whump situations, authors tend to make Shawn very solemn and dramatic, which is fine and good, but it was neat to see a different interpretaion.
Good job!
Date: January 31, 2009 4:55 pm Title: Gunshot
Great story! I hope Shawn is ok T_T