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Reviewer: suminghan75 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 18, 2020 7:06 am Title: Chapter 5: You're Moments Ago, But Seconds Away

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Reviewer: catoo7 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 29, 2010 8:48 am Title: Chapter 5: You're Moments Ago, But Seconds Away

Every chapter it got more exeiting! Wonderful work! Good luck they find Lassiter and Juliet still alive!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your wonderful review! I love hearing that you find each chapter getting more exciting and suspenseful. :) Yay! 

Thank you so much for reading! Hope you like the rest of the story; update coming soon. Thanks again!

 

~silverluna

Reviewer: hbee Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 21, 2010 9:12 am Title: Chapter 5: You're Moments Ago, But Seconds Away

PLEASE finish. I'm hooked!

Author's Response:

Hi! Thanks for your review! I will get back to this story soon. Thanks for reading! :)

 

~silverluna

Reviewer: EriKaBalDeL Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 02, 2010 6:20 pm Title: Chapter 5: You're Moments Ago, But Seconds Away

i love it!!!!!!!
i'm wondering though, are you completely disregarding the 4th season????

and what about this retired sergeant who used to be partners with lassiter??? when was he mentioned??? in which episode? cuz i don't remember lassie ever being in the hospital, or someone coming to visit him...

update soon!!! this is very interesting!!!

oh, question, isn't hitting lassie in the face with the tazer dangerous???
shouldn't his facial nerves be damaged?

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your review. Glad you love it so far.

To answer your questions: I started writing this before the fourth season premiered, so I may continue to operate with that in mind, and only use selective details of the 4th season. You should know that I will not be including anything to do with "Mr. Yin"--there is no Mr. Yin in my story in this universe.

The retired sergeant is character I created, first introduced in my story "Ask For Another Day". If you choose to read that story, you will discover those details are part of it, but it's not a requirement to read it to understand this one.

As for the taser injuries, I take this story as a work of fiction and invite my readers to suspend their disbelief when it comes to injury/medical detail, as well as many other things. I do do research, but I am certainly not a medical care professional so I would say that not everything I write about will be a perfect mirror as to what might occur in real life. Again, this is fiction, and I do take liberties.

Thanks again for reading; I appreciate hearing your comments. I'm currently experiencing computer problems, so I'm not certain when an update will be ready.

~silverluna

Reviewer: abs Signed [Report This]
Date: February 27, 2010 7:00 pm Title: Chapter 5: You're Moments Ago, But Seconds Away

okay, silverluna, i lied. apparently, i'm not scurrying off to re-read AFAD right away. i missed that you added a chapter to this story too! G-d, you've been busy! and this makes me so excited! *attempts a squee, but doesn't really know what to do.* so yay! 

it's so exciting that you're bringing marks back. i really, really liked his character in "afad"!! it will be very interesting to see how he falls back into the team of characters you have going on right now. i didn't realize this story seems like a sequel to "afad"?! ohhh this is so exciting! 

i still love your ability to capture the rawness of the fear and confusion that you have shawn portray and how his relationship with his father (as messed up as may be) still provides him the support that he needs. i love how you show henry giving shawn his undivided support and telling shawn the entire yang thing is not his fault, despite what he (and the others) may think. 

your vivid descriptions make me feel like i'm actually in the story itself and taking in the hecticness of everything that's going on around the characters. i love how your writing style changes too as scenes do...you go from hectic and tense when you're following shawn  to cold and calculating (and sometimes crazy) when you're showing yang.

and i love that you still have the chief in your stories...i miss her on the show. :( and you give her a very powerful character while she tries to stay in control of her department and her emotions. 

and my favorite line of the whole this chapter is "Always, always chasing ghosts" because you can just feel the same hopeless and helplessness in that line that you know shawn feels through the entire story. 

i can't wait to see what happens next! you have so much potential for where to take the story from here! maybe it's time for yang to change the rules again? send shawn on a massive scavenger hunt that gives him clues to try and find both her and the two detectives. can't wait to see how you set up his having to "choose" between the 2 of them. because i know you love the psych characters too much to really kill one of them off...i hope. :) 

i can't wait to see what happens next! NOW, i'm off to re-read afad!! YAY! 

Author's Response:

abs!!! I'm so sorry my author response is so late. I feel bad I’m so slow. Sorry. :( Just in case you didn't get that email, a few weeks ago when I was still without a computer, I went to the library and typed up this very long, possibly witty (lol) response to you ... and then when I went to post, PF told me I wasn't signed in! :( I tried to get the page back, but it was gone. So I will attempt to recreate my expressions of thrill and happiness at another wonderful and super meaningful review from you. :D *hugs* Thanks! Your reviews have always meant so much to me—Thank you so much x that impossible number of infinity for all your support and encouraging, wonderful and joy inducing words. *SQUISHES & HUGS* :)


The very first thing I've been wanting to tell you (besides "thank you") is your suggestion about making Free Play into a "sort of sequel" to AFAD. That idea hadn't crossed my mind, even as I thought about the best ways to bring Marks back (*squee!* I'm so excited you love his return!). But this suggestion opens up an entirely new set of possibilities and directions, and revs me up thinking of how to explore it. So many massive thanks and hugs for that alone! :D


I'm so thrilled to hear you are enjoying Vick—as I've mentioned, I think, she's a character I knew nothing about starting AFAD and who has completely grown on me. A few chapters back for this story, a reviewer suggested they would love to see a "superhero"-esque Vick who grabs her gun and goes to find Lassiter and Juliet herself. I loved this idea and it has helped to shape her character in this story, now and for future scenes. I love having her as an anchor, but still human and slightly emotional, I guess she ends up feeling gritty and real to me that way. Yang! Yang and Mary are getting to be scary beasts, lol. ;) 

"Always, always chasing ghosts"! *SQUEE!!!!!!* Thank you so much for mentioning this! I think I would have to say this line is kind of a metaphor for this whole story. YAY, I'm so happy it had a resonance for you! 

Thank you so much for your awesome suggestions—I'm sooooo grateful! I definitely want to get back to this one and just really need a push (thanks for the push!). :D Thanks again for everything! *HUGS*

 

~silverluna

Reviewer: lin Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 03, 2010 11:30 pm Title: Chapter 5: You're Moments Ago, But Seconds Away

amazing!!!  can't wait for more!

love the whump!  especially the lassie whump.   

 



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for reading! :) Thanks for your kind words. :) I'm happy to hear you love the whump—especially the Lassie whump. There will definitely be more whumpage, for Lassie and others. ;) 

Thanks again!

~silverluna

Reviewer: Okapi Signed [Report This]
Date: November 18, 2009 4:59 pm Title: Chapter 5: You're Moments Ago, But Seconds Away

I'm sorry I haven't reviewed this yet...I'm a bit late to the game and I just discovered this story a couple of weeks ago.  

This is just an awesome story so far. It's so good, that I'm a bit concerned the show won't be able to follow up on this Yang stuff as well as you've done here. ;) You've nailed Yang, totally. Her character here comes across so well.  And you get so deeply into the thoughts of everyone else, it really heightens the emotional impact of the story.  And then, of course, there's all the great whump, of which I'm a big fan.  It's cool to see Adam Marks back.  I'm curious to see what he brings to the search.  I can't wait to read more!  Thanks for yet another great fic!  :)



Author's Response:

Hey Okapi,

Thank you so much for your review! :D No problem, glad to have you here reading & enjoying! *squee* :D I have to tell that I simultaneously blushed, grinned, bounced around & squeed reading that you are 'worried' my "sequel"'s material could possibly be better than what Psych may have to offer in *their* Yang sequel. :D :D :D *major blushing that can be seen from space* :D *hugs* Thank you for saying that— I'm quite sure you made my entire month. :D Thank you thank you thank you thank you— really, I"m so happy now! :) 

I love trying to get into Yang's head; I want to know her other sides & dimensions & layers (creepy as that may turn out, or already is!)— gah, thank you— I'm really thrilled you feel I have "nailed her character". :) I keep working towards the right balance of terribly crazy and then at least half-human, lol (if there's any of that left.) I also want to know her back story, what brought her to be the serial she is today. 

Heehee, I can't seem to help myself when it comes to getting into the characters' heads, telling another story through their thoughts alone— *squee* and Yays for emotional impact! :D I'm happy again that you are finding these sections to your liking & enjoyment. :D *squee* 

Haha, whump! It was funny, a short time ago it seems I didn't even know what whumpage was and now I almost can't get enough— and I have this plan to whump as many characters as I can (within reason) in this story (first with lots-o-Lassie & Jules whump— which will last for a while... maybe even, *cough* longer). ;) Yay for more whumpage fans! :)

At first, I wasn't sure how I'd manage to get Adam Marks in, or what he would do, but I think that's all starting to come together— well, at least some of it is in my head. :) It's okay, he's a patient guy. ;)  (Though his "bad-ass" side has been requested, so I will strive towards that too.) ;) 

Thank you soooooooooooooooooooooo much for reading & again for your review! :) So excited you've come along for the ride! *squee!!!!* :D

~silverluna

Reviewer: JR88fan Signed [Report This]
Date: November 11, 2009 7:58 am Title: Chapter 5: You're Moments Ago, But Seconds Away

""It's him, he's the killer." Vick heard a retrospection of Shawn Spencer's voice of six months ago..."  YES!  YES!  YES!  YES!

Welcome back, Marks!

"She didn't know how she knew all of this after one meeting, not even a full hour— and know even less about Lightly, who had been instrumental in— Spilled milk, let it go, she told herself."  I love your portrayal of Vick in this story!!

"A mistake— I made a mistake. I chose the wrong one— Shawn pressed his palms tighter against his face. He felt cold inside. What if I— again? This time was much more serious than "simple" matters of the heart— this was literally life and death. "I can't choose," Shawn blurted out, his voice muffled by his hands."  Great segue between closing scene of Yang episode and your story.  :)

"Directly responsible. Shawn's mouth twisted. There, there was Henry."  Henry, Henry, Henry...  

Stale popcorn smell in the room - another awesome callback!

Yay! that Shawn is getting his sea legs as it were and is starting to feel angry and determined!



Author's Response:

JR! Thank you so much for your continued support & for your awesome review. :) Heehee, glad you like the addition of Marks to the story— it seems like he will fit in well. :) 

Awww, thanks so much, I'm happy you love Vick here! :) She is really fun to write, to get inside her head as she focuses on being rational— though she's still definitely thrown by the surrealism of the situation. Another good reason to have Marks there— though I would have faith in her abilities to be levelheaded and maybe even super heroine-like, lol, even if she were just leading this on her own. :) 

OMG, thank you thank you thank! I'm so thrilled you mentioned the Abby-Jules choice Shawn had to make— compared now to the choice he has to make between saving only Jules or Lassie or letting both of them die. Woo-hoo, linkage! :) Yes! Glad you liked the segue! :D

Aw, I had to throw in some regular Henry with the Concerned! Henry. :) Lol, or at least try to. :) 

The popcorn! Yes, that is a call back to episode... and it may also be a clue for later on. ;) 

Shawn is indeed starting to turn— and getting his focus on. :) 

Thank you so much for telling me what you liked— it means so much! (And makes me want to continue) *hugs*

~silverluna

 

Reviewer: EgorStandish Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 09, 2009 8:06 pm Title: Chapter 5: You're Moments Ago, But Seconds Away

Firstly! OMFG! You zapped them again! So soon! Yay you!

I really love the way you're getting into Vick's head here. She's a very interesting character and very believable but we don't see much of her on the show anymore or in fic. I thank you for giving her so much time in your story, giving us a very accurate view of what goes on in her head.

And Marks! There he is. I'm all ready for him worrying about Lassiter and hopefully kicking arse sometime soon. I love your OC's. You write them in a way that makes it seem like they're been there forever, just waiting for their moment to shine.

I absolutely loved this line : He obviously cared about Lassiter's well being, seeming to have a soft spot for her curmudgeonly Head Detective, which was some kind of miracle in of itself.

I really like what you're doing with Shawn too. This line says so much about what's going through Spencer's head: Shawn's stomach twisted. His usual self didn't lean towards violence, but he knew that he would welcome a fit of rage now, allowing himself to pummel the inanimate objects in this room— crime scene— and then would also be satisfied to crumple on the floor, drained of energy.

And as always, you're descriptive writing - which is so inspiring - reads like a movie with subtitles. Yes, I've said that before but it needs repeating: They had been here; this space held their smells, along with the sweaty trappings of trickled out fear, the metallic grimace of dried blood, and one other— stale popcorn. The mention of popcorn just flings the reader straight back into the The Yang episode. Awesome.

I love this and as always, I hope you update soon, and of course update 'Hard to Believe it's Okay' :)

 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your awesome review! You've made me smile and feel good again— thank you for your continued loyalty to this story and for *sniffle* continued encouragement. Thank you so much for taking the previous time to tell me what you liked/ loved about the current chapter. *Massive hugs and billions of thanks* 

Haha, an "OMFG" for the zapping! :) Awesome! I wasn't completely certain about that scene—I wanted to show a little bit of them before everyone arrives to see that they are no longer there. :D I'm glad you liked their whump though. :) Wanted to squeeze that in too!

*Squee* It's funny, because Vick was a character completely unknown to me when I started writing "Afad"— but I started learning about her and "fitting" her to that story— and I feel that in this one, I'm trying to do the same/ similar. I do enjoy getting into characters' heads. :) And Vick has definitely grown on me— yay for more "screen"— er— story time for her.  I'm so beyond happy to hear that you are finding what goes on in her head accurate and believable. *giddy dance*

Yay, Marks is finally here! Or rather, he's driving really fast to get here asap. :) Heehee, I love that you want to see him in full "worry about Lassiter mode"— me too! :) *squishes you* Thank you for saying those nice things about my OCs— "that that the way I write them makes them feel like they've always been in the Psych universe— waiting to shine."!!!! *massive hugs* *faints* *huge anime style grin* 

Awww! You picked out some of my favorite lines from this chapter! :D *jumping up & down* Some foreshadowing of Marks' "soft spot" (and perhaps his later "ass kicking" skills). ;) GAH! *hugs* You *like* "now leans towards violence" Shawn. Haha. Okay, not so much, but it is fun writing this side of him— plus the one that is practically falling apart. ;)  (Plus it helps me ease more into the humor aspects so they hopefully don't come off "corny", lol. I hope to one day get to the place where the humor aspects come as naturally as the angst and dark stuff does for me. lol) 

*Squee!* *Hugs you* *blushing* Thank you for saying you find my writing inspiring! :D That makes me want to write more— me, and my work, "an inspiration"? *wide eyes* :)  OMG! I love love love love love love that you say my story "reads like a movie with subtitles"!!!!! GAHHHHH!!!!! *faints*  *Springs up to the sky* Definitely— those are among my favorite lines of the chapter! Ah, and the popcorn! ;) I'm happy you say it "flings you straight back into the 'Mr. Yang' episode"— Yes! :D That was my intention— plus, it's a clue for later. ;D Yay for "Yang" reminders! :D 

Thank you for the awesome and the love! & for raising my spirits— I don't know if I can ever accurately express the thanks I owe to you. Thank you for encouraging me to update soon— and that lovely other one too. :D *glee* Thank you! *hugs* :)

~silverluna

Reviewer: Psychicchic21 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 08, 2009 8:15 pm Title: Chapter 5: You're Moments Ago, But Seconds Away

This is a fantastic story! I can't wait for more! BTW i'm having trouble getting reviews for my story, if you wouldn't mind, i'd really appreciate another writer's feedback, it's called Shawn took a shot in the dark and actually got shot! I'd really appreciate it if you could because you are a great writer and i just need some new ideas, please?

Your Loyal Reader

Psychicchic21



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your review, the generous rating & for reading. I really appreciate hearing from you; I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far. :) Thank for the very nice "fantastic" adjective too. :)

Sure, I'll stop by your story. 

Thanks again.

~silverluna

 



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