Date: January 11, 2012 11:22 am Title: Guilt and Sorrow
I just loved how you made Shawn act more childesh and add more jokes when he got uncomfortable. It seems perfectly fitting for his character :)
Well done!
Date: April 20, 2010 12:07 am Title: Guilt and Sorrow
Really lovely. I like how it shifted back and forth between the present and the past. I think it was dramatic without being over-the-top. You captured Henry and Shawn's relationship very well.
Date: November 03, 2007 2:05 am Title: Guilt and Sorrow
Don't write dramatic pieces my ass. This was wonderful. I loved Shawn's reactions to feeling guilty, the image of a little four year old Shawn saving his trash all day to go through with his dad makes me grin like crazy. It should be crime for you to not write more drama.
Author's Response: :D:D:D Thank you!! I so glad you liked the story. And Shawn's reactions (cute little Shawn *melts*). Thanks again for the awesome review! :D
Author's Response: I'm so glad, not I. Gah! *Hits head on wall*
Date: September 07, 2007 2:45 am Title: Guilt and Sorrow
Loved the entire feel of this story. Very neat. I don't know exactly how to desribe the great feeling I got from reading this. Drama, yet not. And with humor, of course, because I couldn't fully love you without it *grins*
Author's Response:
Thank you! It really is a thrill to know that the feel of the story was right for you. And humor - seriously, with Shawn and Gus, is it possible to write without humor? Maybe, but not for me :P. Thanks again!
[Report This]Date: August 23, 2007 1:33 am Title: Guilt and Sorrow
Great story!! I really liked it a lot!!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :)
[Report This]Date: August 12, 2007 8:04 pm Title: Guilt and Sorrow
I really loved this piece. It had just the right balance of angst and drama, not to mention very funny dialogue. You kept each character...well...very "in-character," particularly Shawn and Henry. I enjoyed reading your take on their relationship because it reminded me so vividly of how they are portrayed on the show.
Not sappy at all. If that's what you call sappy, then I'm a sucker for sappiness.
I'll look for more stories by you, Stefanie. :)
Author's Response:
Thank you! I was hoping the humor would prevent the drama from being overpowering :). I'm glad you enjoyed the Henry-Shawn interaction; it's one of the most grounding parts of the show for me. Thanks again for your review!
[Report This]Date: August 10, 2007 5:03 am Title: Guilt and Sorrow
So many ROTFLMBO parts and lines! I'm just gonna do brief recaps of the best:
'Don't flirt with my nurse.'
'Angry McWorrypants'
'Batman Begins' (FREAKING AWESOME VISUAL ON THAT ONE BY THE WAY! LOL! :D)
'Sorta like the Mona Lisa. Cool, in a lethal sort of way.'
Gus's obsession with screaming.
'after a long moment’s silent conversation with the door' *snerk*
'prayed to whatever angels protected fathers of Shawn-like children' Those poor angels . . . >:D
“You’re a pain when you’re irresponsible and insufferable when you’re not.” LOL! That is *so* true! :D
Whew!
So overall: IT ROCKED! Srsly. It rocked the house right down to the foundations.
And sappy isn't the word for it. Sappy has a negative connotation and this is definitely not a bad thing. It was . . . smushy. Yup. That's it. Smushy.
The length was just fine even for a one-shot. And you're right that trying to chapter it would have broken it up. This was perfect as it was.
The flashbacks were freaking sweet! It worked really well with the whole overall story. Probably better than a straight chronological shot could ever hope to. Definitely the right way to go. :D
In closing: AWESOME! I can't wait for another great story from you!
Maja
Author's Response:
I'm doing a little dance of happiness in my head. Someone other than me liked those lines! Yay! The Mona Lisa line is part of the reason I love writing Gus's POV. A lot of the things that come into my mind can be put directly into his. Oh, and his obsession with screaming? That's really my obsession with his screaming. 'Cause really, hearing (and watching) Gus scream just makes me burst out laughing :D.
Smushy - I like smushy. Something between angsty and fluffy :). And it really is nice to know that the angst wasn't too over-the-top. That's the danger with a drama-novice like me. So- thanks! So glad you liked the flashback format. I was afraid that starting at the middle and jumping backwards might confuse readers, and since I knew what the story was, I couldn't be a good judge of its effectiveness.
Thank you for such a thought-out review! (And yes, I'm still dancing.)
[Report This]Date: August 10, 2007 5:03 am Title: Guilt and Sorrow
I've read adn written longer one-shots - it's perfectly fine.
Anyway, I really loved the way it was written and the emotional flow, anyway, and the angst, so please keep it up!
Author's Response: Thank you! It's so nice to hear (erm.. read) that someone liked the story as a whole. (And it's an encouragement to write more too!)
Date: August 10, 2007 4:04 am Title: Guilt and Sorrow
good story... loved the four year old shawn bit!
Author's Response: Thanks! I wanted to give a little bit of a backstory to Shawn's reaction of guilt, and to Henry's figuring it all out. And of course, love all Henry-Shawn moments that exist, alas, only in my imagination. :)
Date: August 10, 2007 1:16 am Title: Guilt and Sorrow
Awww!! I loved it! Especially the part about little Shawn's penitence. Very nice!
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review! (And I love getting Awww's - I store them up and live off them while I'm writing the next story :D.)