Date: October 25, 2009 8:44 pm Title: After the Chase
I think it is great! I can't wait to read more. I think you captured Shawn and Henry very well.
Date: October 25, 2009 10:16 am Title: After the Chase
This is your first Psych fic? Damn, this was great! You've pegged the characters right on. I spotted some spelling errors, but please know that I truly enjoyed reading this. Will there be more? ;)
Date: October 25, 2009 7:02 am Title: After the Chase
I loved it! I thought it was great! Thanks for giving us this version :) I say there can never be too many extensions of this scene. Haha didn't notice it went unbeta'd.. Altough since u mention it there was one point where Gus 'piered', and I thought u meant peered? Newho, I liked ur focus on Shawns dad, awww love there relationship soooo cute. I especially thought the 'little boy' at the end was super cute :) I concur that Shawn def would have collapsed after that scene (shame we didn't see it) and I love ur dialogue :) Nicely written, in character and not overdone, like I said, I love it :)
Author's Response: Lol! I did mean peer. I just fixed fixed, and thanks for your kind words, and for pointing out my typo :)
Date: October 25, 2009 6:40 am Title: After the Chase
I'm going to be completely honest with you here and say that this is very good so far. However, I found it next to impossible to read due to lack of paragraph breaks. IT WAS ALL ONE BIG BLOCK *flails around in a cricle*. The formaatting may have died a little when you posted, but I would be happy to beta through it for you, though I didn't spot any obvious mistakes in what I did read :D
Good job, just fit some paragraphs in and feel free to send it my way for any intensity of beta-ing you're after (:
Author's Response: The story has breaks in it, but it didn't upload right. I fixed it almost immediatley I just wasn't fast enough for you lol!