Reviewer: LovePsychFic Signed starstarstarstarhalf star [Report This]
Date: December 13, 2012 4:12 am Title: We're a Rather Close-Knit Family, Really...

Now I'm intrigued by the idea of Yang following Shawn during his time away from Santa Barbara. Hmmm … may be issuing a new challenge soon.

Enjoyed the story, especially that Maddie was Henry's guide.

Reviewer: Mrs-N-Uzumaki Signed [Report This]
Date: February 05, 2012 6:45 pm Title: We're a Rather Close-Knit Family, Really...

I can't totally imagine that happening if Shawn never returned! Great job!

Reviewer: silverluna Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 14, 2011 2:16 pm Title: We're a Rather Close-Knit Family, Really...

OMG, I LOVE this!!!! "Ghostly spirit"!Maddie taking Henry on a meaningful Christmas Carol-esque journey through the past—of what would have really been if Shawn hadn't come back to Santa Barbara (those Shawn's versions were *cute* XD). 

Love love love that Henry's lingering love for Maddie causes him to dream of her so vividly that he can sometimes smell cinnamon and hear her voice lighter and softer from a time around when they must have met. 

Loved these passages:

Perhaps more than just occasionally if he were to be completely honest with himself.  There was a time where self-reflection would have been considered taboo.  But with time, loss, and maturity, a little introspection every now and then was hardly anything to fear.  

Much.

Sometimes when he dreamed of her he could smell cinnamon and hear voices in the background amidst the sounds of carnival rides and laughing children.  In those dreams, her voice was younger and light.

Love also that tonight's dream visit has Maddie's voice set in the same tone that it would be to get "tight-lipped officers to open up"—which is a perfect description of Henry at the moment. 

Yes, Henry! *stares pointedly* “I told you that there were some things you needed to see, Henry.  That’s why I’m here, to show you what life would have been like if Shawn hadn’t come back to Santa Barbara.”

Knitting?! ROFL XD I'm really trying to picture Henry knitting. Henry. Knitting. XD This is why he needs Shawn. XD LOL

Aww, Henry pretending not to be proud of Shawn in front of Ghosty!Maddie, priceless! :D I love that Henry has this scrapbook of his and Shawn's accomplishments, and that he updates it frequently—*obviously* soooo proud of his "wayward" son. Henry, so not fooling me! xD

GUHHHHHHHHHHHH. AFGSDAJJDS:JGJSOJOSGJJGSJDFJGJ *massive flailing* This is so good and so AWESOME!!!!!!!!

Then suddenly it all changed.  He blinked rapidly.  Unbelieving, he quickly flipped backwards several pages, momentarily forgetting his normal care of each delicate page.


With each article and each photograph, as soon as his eyes could take in the images, they were replaced just as quickly.  Headlines that he once knew by heart were being re-written before his eyes.


SBPD Head Detective Arrested for Prisoner’s Murder

Explosion Gigantesca de Romance Actor Murdered by Co-star. Ratings Plummet. Series Canceled


Santa Barbara Unsolved Murder Rate at All Time High

 

YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES!!!!! This is brilliant and perfect and exactly what Henry needs to see!!!!! After all, he *might* be able to get on board with the knitting. xD OMG, AWESOME!!!!!! 

"And Psych was never started." O.o Guh! This actually made me tear up! *sniffles* 

OH. MY. GOD. OH. MY. GOD. OH. MY. GOD. OHMYGODOHMYGODOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGGMOGMOSGJ GAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! *passes out*

“Eleven victims in eight cities.  There was never a pattern but there was always a game that resulted in the same prize.  Each death took him farther from coming back home. He learned to move around more often.  He refused to make contact with anyone in case it marked them as victims.  He stopped sending postcards.  He never called Gus, never came back to visit.  He didn’t dare.  Eventually, he dropped off the radar completely.  After that, I don‘t know-” she broke off, unable to continue.

Your grand imagining of what COULD have happened regarding Yang following Shawn around, killing people . . . JUST GAHHHHHHHH I am stunned to incoherency because I'm just so blown away by the awesome creepiness of this!!!!!!!!!! This is the kind of stuff of nightmares . . . SHAWN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SHAWN ALL ALONE OUT THERE WITH HER........................... *weeps openly* OMFG YOU ARE AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 

*still breathless* WOW. What a great exchange between Henry and Maddie, raw emotion vs. blatant sensibility/truth. *flailing*

*sniffles* 

Maddie remained in place next to the tree, barely visible against the backlighting of the tree.  It didn’t matter that he couldn’t see her; she was still as much of a presence as before when her voice wafted over him.

 

“Mad, would you…” Henry let the question trail off.  Though he didn’t speak the words out loud, she picked up the meaning just as he knew she would.

 

“Henry, you know I’m not really here.  But maybe when you wake up, you can ask Shawn.  I think you’ll find that you two have a lot to talk about.”

GUHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH THAT WAS SO BEAUTIFUL OMG SO SO SO SO PERFECT!!!!!!! THANK YOU MUCH FOR THIS STORY OMG YOU ARE AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!

*reads it again* :D

 

Reviewer: EriKaBalDeL Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 31, 2010 11:04 am Title: We're a Rather Close-Knit Family, Really...

i love it!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! It thrills me to know that  you enjoyed:)

Reviewer: 88Keys Signed [Report This]
Date: December 26, 2010 2:48 pm Title: We're a Rather Close-Knit Family, Really...

I loved that.  I could really visualize it happening.  I like how you worked in the Yin/Yang case and gave us a picture of what might have happened to Shawn and to Henry had he not come back.  And the idea of Henry knitting is awesome.  :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much - I love that you could visualize everything, ESPECIALLY the knitting.  I admit, the mental image of Henry knitting does epic things to me.  Hee.  Thanks again for taking the time to review.  It is very much appreciated.

Reviewer: tash Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 26, 2010 2:09 pm Title: We're a Rather Close-Knit Family, Really...

ok, finally on a computer! :)  I really enjoyed this one shot.  It showed how much Maddie still means to Henry.  I really like this more serious take on what would have happened if Shawn hadn't come.  Nice progression from a more lighthearted consequence-- Henry's knitting hobby-- to Yang following Shawn from place to place, and ensuring he never returns home.  

Eventually, he dropped off the radar completely.  After that, I don‘t know-” she broke off, unable to continue.

The implication here is so scary and heartbreaking.

The ending was really sweet, and I liked Maddie teasing Henry about the latch-hooking rugs. 

Thanks for sharing this!



Author's Response: Guuuhhhhh!  Thank YOU for sharing THIS!  Seriously, I adore the feedback because it helps me to know whether or not these scenes only make sense in my head.  And I gotta tell ya, my head can be a scary place sometimes:) 

Reviewer: skylucy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 26, 2010 9:43 am Title: We're a Rather Close-Knit Family, Really...

Fantastic story. I loved how you wrote this and it would have been great if they could have filmed it and made Polarizing Express into an entire movie! Thank you so much for sharing.

Author's Response: Thank you skylucy!  I truly believe that if the powers that be really loved us, EVERY ep would be a feature length movie!  Hey, a girl's gotta dream. Right?  Seriously, thank you very much for your kind review!

Reviewer: GBFreak1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 26, 2010 2:45 am Title: We're a Rather Close-Knit Family, Really...

Awespme!  This was great.  Merry Christmas.

Author's Response: D'awwwwwww THANK YOU!!!  I hope you had a fabulous Christmas and a happy New Year.  Here's to all the great fic that 2011 can bring.  You know what would be awesome?  If someone were to write a fic with a rooftop shootout. Yeah, that would be AWESOME!  ;)  Love  ya, my friend.  Thank you again:)

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 26, 2010 2:04 am Title: We're a Rather Close-Knit Family, Really...

Merry xmas! This was good! Will write more l8r as on bberry now.
-Tash

Author's Response: Thank you again:)  And, as a person who does MOST of my fic reading on my blackberry, I can totally relate!  *fistbumps*



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