Date: May 14, 2008 3:28 pm Title: Chapter 4
Well I don't usually correct people, but since you asked on the Chapter End Notes to help you find any typos, on the title it's not 'The most Wnderful Time of the year' it's 'The most Wonderful Time of the year'. Unless that was a joke, then I'm sorry! Good Job though! Update soon!
Date: November 13, 2007 9:11 pm Title: Chapter 6
I like the first part of the chapter better, but it has to do with Shule so maybe taht is why I like it better. The second part was god too though. Just for the record I reviewed for the last chapter, so just don't blame me for the lack of reviews.
Thanks. It's just that some people aren't pulling thier wieght...
Wahtever. You are better than them Congratulations!
C ya next chapter.
Date: November 13, 2007 5:20 pm Title: Chapter 6
Oh, I love the Freud quote. You put it in the story at the perfect place. It was fabulous. You are doing a fantastic job with this story. The mystery is building the sexual tension is building - everything is building - it's like a construction site, or something. Keep up the amazing work.
Author's Response: It's nice to know some one thinks the story has structure! I'm just really writing at random. Thanks alot.
Date: November 13, 2007 12:28 pm Title: Chapter 6
Oooh, Shawn's in for it now. Gus is pissed. I really would like to see Gus triumph over Shawn in some way, since in the show, it's usually Shawn winning over Gus, especially making fun of him.
And a framed will? That's wacked.
Keep up the good writing.
Author's Response: Oh yes. There should be revenge in the next chapter. Gus will be avenged, some how....
Date: November 13, 2007 12:31 am Title: Chapter 6
Hmmm... something tells me there's more to the whole will business than there appears at the moment... great work. Keep it up! Can't wait for more!
actually, there's not more to the will buisness because it's perfectly normal to frame one and put it on the wall of the house you inherited from your dead father......right?
I changed my mind. I'm gonna go with you on this one.
Date: November 08, 2007 9:26 pm Title: Chapter 5
Good chapter, I like it even though Holloween is over though, just continue with it any way. I look forward to the next chapter. Love Shules action as always.
Date: November 08, 2007 5:03 am Title: Chapter 5
God, I love the way you have them flirt. I know I've said this before (or at least I hope I have - or else this will be a little embarrassing) but you have an amazing way with the banter. It's incredible. I love the whole section where he's finishing her sentences. It's hilarious and adorable and something I can completely picture Shawn doing. I also loved his thoughts while waiting for Jules to catch up as they read the files. Great job.