Date: March 24, 2012 1:50 am Title: A Place in the Middle
Absolutely wonderful. Great job!
Date: February 14, 2011 4:38 pm Title: A Place in the Middle
SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm so so so so so so so excited you wrote this fic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *flails madly* I LOVED the snapshots into "Garth Longmore"'s past and was so intrigued to know more in your 'Paint It Black'. So lots of thank yous in advance for this!!!!!! :D You ROCK!!!!!!!!!
WOW. WOW. WOW. WOW. WOW. WOW. I am so impressed by every aspect of this story. I have to say that may be the first story I've ever read where I was so absorbed into every word that by the end of reading I had absolutely no coherency to even properly shape the words "I LOVED THIS TO THE HIGHEST DEGREE OF LOVING A PERFECT AND BEAUTIFUL CREATION OF ART" that I felt I should wait until everything had sunk in more before I attempted a proper review. So in any event, this story is so AMAZING! I seriously want to quote almost every single sentence down here in this little box but that might be wise. ;)
This is just the most perfect story for this character—so much more intensive than anything imaginable. I love how this story is in a way perfectly paralleled with the "snapshot" from your "Paint It Black" story. I am so stunned by the supreme awesomeness of this piece!!!! It has made me take a second look at this character—both as created by Psych and as entirely enhanced by you (both of you authors). :) In the episode, he was shown with a second layer of rare humanity that isn't often given when it's a criminal that is being presented. And here, you've taken this second layer and brought everything to light—really almost making Longmore/Macquirre to be a sort of tragic hero, and certainly a character you feel something for you in your gut—empathy, sympathy. *gives me the good shiveries*
I love love love love love how seamlessly you've woven his past in the jungle ("not murder, just a job—orders coming from those trusted above him") to what he's encountering in the present—when he doesn't want to be the criminal element but has no choice but do it because he, like anybody else, wants to have a future. It's such a sad thing (makes me weepy) thinking about how Longmore just wanted to be regular respectable citizen but because of this incident with the accidental shooting (and eventual mercy killing) of this young boy in the jungle, he almost has no choice but to fall back into the "old life" of crime—what is familiar, even though now it has a different name.
I love the way you describe what he did in the jungle as a sniper as a "just a job"—yet the business of taking orders without knowing if "good is always good" and "bad is always bad" eventually grows weary enough for him to question everything.
These scenes are so perfectly weaved in the scenes of the episode—I JUST LOVE ALL THIS, seeing into his head, following him through these memories/flashbacks which seem to always be right there on the edge of his consciousness—(and seem to find an easy trigger in Shawn's constant yapping). And OMFG, the connection between the boy shot in the jungle and Shawn—here I am still gasping in partially incoherency. These scenes are so masterful and artfully executed it's as if I'm looking at a painting that I'm not entirely convinced isn't actually a photograph—the representation to reality is that spot on. O.O *gasping for air* I may have to come back for another review and talk extensively about this part for a while. *bows to you*
The other parts which gave me intense chills are of course related to this—as the flashbacks permeate Longmore's present as if they were more recent memories from minutes ago, rather than several years—are the parts with Longmore crushing Shawn's neck and the following part with Shawn's whimpers that "that was his dad"!!!! (*cries*) and then the part at the end that is almost so dreamlike you the reader aren't completely sure if you're in a memory of Garth's from the jungle or if it's really the present—where Henry is demanding to know where Shawn is. I would guess that it's a little bit of both—but perhaps we will never know if Garth was actually shot in the jungle too by a father seeking revenge.
I think I definitely need to come back and review a second time because I am so in awe and still partially speechless over the awesomeness of this piece that perhaps I need more time to fully express everything I loved about it. :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR WRITING THIS!!!!!!!!! <3 LOVED IT <3
Date: February 09, 2011 7:28 pm Title: A Place in the Middle
I totally forgot to comment on the title: I really like the title, it's what first drew me to the story, and once I read the summary I had to quickly devour it. I particularly love the double entendre of "execution". A perfectly worded title.
Date: February 09, 2011 2:13 pm Title: A Place in the Middle
I must come back and give this the proper review it deserves when I have more time, but I'll leave you with this: GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Yup, that sums up the awesomeness of this quite nicely. -JR
Date: February 09, 2011 1:00 am Title: A Place in the Middle
This was awesome. Ever since I saw STASITD, I've always wondered about MacQuarrie's thoughts during it. I love how you weaved the flashbacks from his time in service and the utter horror of the reality he lived and the consequential guilt. (Also, reminded me of a book I read in HS-- The Things They Carried.) This was a fascinating look into MacQuarrie's affected moral compass.
(though part of me still really wants to know MacQuarrie's thoughts from when Shawn pitched him the wiener mobile welded to a zamboni idea. *snickers*)