Date: April 18, 2011 8:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
She has faced criminal masterminds and serial killers and never has she shown anything but a spine of steel and a resolve to see justice forged out of cold iron.
She has been training under the toughest sonuvabitch in the SBPD and it shows. XD Awesome!
Loved this as well:
She is still polite until provoked, sympathetic to the survivors, and chatty with her coworkers, but when the situation calls for it, she shuts down her human side like flicking a switch and she becomes the job.
This has a great bite to it—she's become so good at what she does that turn off empathy at will, become that cold, discerning interrogator and not stop until, until, until, it's over, or it's solved, or whatever needs to be done is done. That is so powerful. And then on the flip side, when she's not at work, not having to "be the job", or be the cheerful one, she can come home and be that dark side thing—the demon, the human, whatever name you want to use—of herself.
I really love the contrast of this:
Sometimes she forgets she even wears a mask, allowing herself to be seduced into believing that this job—this life—hasn't changed her. She believes her own propaganda, and maybe that's not such a bad thing anyway.
to what follows—a weeping, self-loathing, almost miserable version of herself who wears the night like a heavy cloak. Juliet is not perfect in either version of herself, not in her persona and not when she's all alone and can let everything out—all the horrible "atrocities" she feels she's wronged herself with. I really love to get a look at Juliet's darker self—what is below that careful exterior, below all that sunshine and warmth. This piece feels very true-to-life; I think we all battle our own demons/ghosts in our own little pieces of darkness, trying to get a fix on where we have gone wrong, who or what we have neglected to "save" or improve.
Slow, lovely, burn. He was wrong. It was already too late for her.
And this, this I think is the *best* part:
She'd give anything, even her very life, to save him from her dark, twisted fate.
WOW. This is quite an interesting twist—Juliet wanting to protect Shawn from her "other self", viewing him as almost "pure" and "innocent". It's so very easy to picture Shawn and Juliet as this pure, innocent, happy, smiley, giggley, sweet, loving couple, and even easier to picture Shawn as the one with the "dark" side—one which draws serial killers to him, which favors black humor, and barely flinches at every kind of horrible looking corpse or murder. But here, it's *Juliet*—*she's* the one "giving in to her addiction" (Shawn!!! That's awesome!) and ends up transformed by Shawn's love.
He'd brush a kiss to her hair and another to her ear and he'd whisper, "It's okay, Jules. I've got you. I'm right here."
And somehow, that was all it took.
I really love what you've done here with all of this. Great ending—that it takes two to balance Juliet's scales. Beautiful piece.
Date: March 04, 2011 6:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was really amazing and beautifully written. The imagery you employed in this really brought out the contrasts in Juliet, the bright happy side, the dark masochistic side, and the bloody side.
Very good, very deep. Post more soon!
Date: March 03, 2011 4:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
this was very poetic, and quite profound insight into the many facets of Juliet. I also like how you describe the effect of Shawn's support for her, ie how the darkness didn't stick to him. (it reminded me of the scene in R&J&J where he tells her he won't let Yin stop him, and of course the final scene in Yang in 2D) nicely done.
Date: March 03, 2011 4:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
That's beautiful! I love it! Very gripping.
Date: March 03, 2011 2:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
Thank you for sharing this intense and very well written insight into Jules and Shawn. It feels so right the way it captures them both. It gives a great depth to what they bring to each other--and why we love Shules.