Date: December 03, 2011 6:47 pm Title: A Winter's Prologue
This. This is BRILLIANT!! I love that you take Psych to these supernatural places, yet do it so believably! I nearly screamed when I saw you had a new story posted and can't wait to see the Psych version of a Christmas Carol! You are EPIC!
Date: December 03, 2011 6:20 pm Title: A Winter's Prologue
Zombie!!!! You did it again (of course)!!
I got so excited that I accidentally posted my review mid paragraphCand had to delete it and start again lol.
Wow, that was such and amazing twist to an American classic. The way you built up to it was so smart.
I honestly had no idea where this was going. I kept thinking, "what!?" (in a good way) as the chapter continued on. As soon as I thought I knew where it was going, it did a total 180 and left me pleasantly enthralled. It was seriously such a fantastic rollercoaster of unique and, I'll say again, smart twists
And I must say, you write creepy rather splendidly. There was just the right amount of suspension and "WTF?"...especially when Dobson appeared and things started to morph into the Twilight zone ;)
Lassie's thought at the beginning had me both laughing and almost convinced he was right. But I am too cheery, so that only lasted a moment :P
"No thank you, but feel free to offer your Kool-Aid to the next miserable asshole down the line and see if he'll take a sip." -I just about died when I read this line. You really have amazing perception of characterization; that was just so Lassie.
"well, except for Mcnab. But he was more overgrown puppy than person anyway, so Carlton didn't really feel he counted." -Nabby!!!!! I adore him. And also his interactions with Lassie. And that description was so spot on. That's what makes McNab who he is.
"All he wanted was three fingers of scotch and the latest copy of Guns & Ammo." -Priceless!!
"That was when he felt it, the unmistakable unease that came with knowing someone was standing behind him, watching him. It made the hairs on the back of his neck stand on end.." -This is the perfect moment of change. I could literally feel the atmosphere change. Even the hairs on the back of my neck stood up!
"They were a milky white with no iris or pupil whatsoever and had a hint of aged yellow in them." -* insert shiver, eyebrow raise, and jaw drop here.* I really wasn't expecting this. I was trying to figure out just what the hell was going on, but I was at a loss for ideas. I love it when I can't guess what's going to happen!
"It was easily the strangest thing he had ever seen in his life and he worked with Shawn Spencer, so that had to be saying something." -ROFL!!!!
I love it that Lassie had no idea why he didn't just shoot McNab. It couldn't be because he is a co-worker, maybe even friend, could it? Lol. Geez, and when McNab walked straight thru the desk...didn't see that coming!
The whole Exchange between Lassie and the quite possibly possessed group of officers was wickedly awesome. It was so....I don't even have a word for how great it was. I was engrossed in every single sentence.
I have to say it again, Zombie. Your detail is phenomenal and impeccable. You know how to entice a reader with every word you write.
You have such a brilliant mind to be able to pull all this detail and your ideas outta that brain of yours. Thanks for posting your masterpieces!
I loved this and I will be waiting loyally for the next update :)