Date: February 28, 2013 5:15 pm Title: Chapter 5: The Devil That You Know Is Better Than The One You Don't
This was a really brilliant chapter!
Thank you so much for all your reviews! So glad you're enjoying the story. :) Thanks for reading! :)
Date: January 10, 2013 5:00 pm Title: Chapter 4: I Should Let It Go, But This One I Will Keep
I wanted so to get on this site yesterday and read the end of this new chapter but I couldn't get to it. Fantastic and worth the wait! I am so looking forward to the next chapter and all the others that will hopefully follow. This is an absolutely fantastic story that I wish could be in Season 8!!!!
Thank you so much for your review!!! So happy to hear all your awesome feedback—and I'm totally blushing!!! You find this tale worthy of Season 8—WOW! Thank you! *BLUSHING* I'm happy you're still reading and supporting this story and finding it to your liking. :D The other day I was inspired and wrote about 700 words for a new scene for the next chapter—so I'm hoping the next update will soon and with months in between. (As for the others, I know, the same! But I'm definitely not abandoning any of them.)
Date: January 09, 2013 2:37 pm Title: Chapter 4: I Should Let It Go, But This One I Will Keep
"Actually, 92, to be accurate," Gus said as he walked up to them.
"Gus, don't be every other lying weatherman."
"I'm not lying, that was temperature they put on record yesterday," Gus countered.
Shawn opened his mouth to respond when Juliet snapped, "Guys!"
They both looked at her and she stared back, all traces of yesterday's sweetness erased. Her brief outburst had earned her an eyebrow raise from Vick, but Juliet didn't catch her eye. "Shawn, you were saying?"—when he opened his mouth again she warned—"and don't get back to talking about the weather."
He heard it, in her tone, the urgency, as if they had reached zero hour, with no wiggle room, no time at all left. Clearing his throat and shooting an apologetic glance at Gus, Shawn continued, "Right, so it couldn't have been that it was too hot for Lassie. Would he take it off to fight—or to shoot someone?"
This whole entire exchange. I've said this before of your writing, but dear stars, this belongs in an episode!! It is SO amazingly perfectly THEM!! I can see it with precise clarity – along with all of the parts leading up to it. Like the sound Shawn's sneakers would make on the sidewalk and the exact brightness and heat of the sun – bright enough to make Juliet squint as she looked up at Shawn. (and the fact that you included that little bit about her shading her eyes is genius writing, it really is. If YOU are actually there in that environment, it means that I am there too and it takes no effort to visualize where they are.)
"No way, his jacket's practically a second skin," Gus commented. "Though, didn't he take it off that one time, before he shot Chavez?"
Gus, please. ROFL!!
In spite of what Emil had said to his guest in his hasty display of anger about no longer wanting to wait, he still took the time to listen to Mr. Spencer's breathing and weigh the silence between them. Mr. Spencer seemed content, in spite of his predicament, to not produce any easy answers, to not spill out any loose chatter from any of the dead wishing to make communications with him. He seemed to be unlike any other person he'd encountered who claimed to have connections to spirit worlds, from the most fraudulent to the most genuine. Mr. Spencer was most unwilling to talk.
I really really love how you've said everything Lassiter ISN'T doing – not talking, not pontificating, not “communing” - which would all be things Shawn WOULD be doing were he the one who'd been captured.
they seemed to match each other in silence, in patience, as if they were both men used to waiting for long periods, gaining little for it, to being disappointed and moving forward in spite of being hurt.
This is really a poignant insight into Lassiter – and shows that Emil has a perception about people that is pretty spot on in spite of him nabbing the wrong guy. You've maintained a deeply convincing story as to how Emil could have made this very critical error. And I really love that you actually had Lassiter attempt to convince Emil that he had the wrong guy, only to be disbelieved. Another thing I really am enjoying with this is how it shows that Lassiter has a very intelligent and calculating side and can plot the best course of action to handle this. But the best? Apparently the only time Lassiter excels at undercover is when he plays someone he oftentimes wants to shoot in the knee bones while simultaneously insisting he ISN'T that guy lol!! And he didn't even need a fake mustache xDD
"Dude!" Shawn exclaimed. "I found a belt!"
Gus wrinkled his nose and looked down, not exactly the reaction Shawn was hoping for. "So what?"
"So, what do you think?"
"What do I think about this belt, or about the smell of gunpowder on it?"
"I—huh?" Shawn squinted down at it and then at Gus. "It it has a smell?"
I had to point my finger at this exchange cause, once more, you've written spectacular dialogue that is just so dead on with the series!! Everything about this is perfect and I almost want to do cartwheels cause I'm so completely gleeful at everything about it! Shawn using his observation skills to spot a clue – then playing a giant hunch that MAYBE it's meaningful, followed by Gus pointing out something that Shawn hadn't considered at all – VALIDATING the hunch in hindsight xD
"I've heard it both ways." He ignored Gus rolling his eyes. "My point is, Gus, that I need your help. You may be 40 percent of the reason why we're able to solve crimes as quickly as we do."
I'm loving this story like a triple layer chocolate cake with double frosting! You are truly and seriously one of my favoritest writers and I get VERY excited every time you update! I've been terribly slacky at reviewing and I apologize but I'm doing my best to make up for that!! Thank you for yet another brilliant chapter!
WOW, THANK YOU for your super awesome review!!! Can I tell you how relieved I am that you pulled out examples from the two Shawn and Gus sections and found them to be *accurate* and *in-character* for the two, respectively?! I'm still incredibly nervous when it comes to writing those two, especially recreating their chemistry and funny banter, but I think I'm getting better (this is the part where I ask you to not look at "Crave" for, well, for anything XD). I was trying to come up with a better "Gus, don't be a—" but sometimes things will just "fit" as they are. I also wanted their exchanges, especially the one with Shawn's parking lot discovery, to lean more towards the side of "crime solving banter"/"clue finding banter", since these types, when it's just the two of them, seem to be a variation on Shawn's usual "talking things out aloud to figure out what's going on". In my "original draft", Shawn and Gus were less a part of the story in the beginning, but I like the direction the story is taking, sort of a duality in time, so I really want to have the two of them, as well as Juliet and Vick, but more active in the entire initial investigation. (Plus, the staring contest between Emil and Lassiter can't last forever.)
I'm totally stunned and blushing you say Shawn and Gus's exchange about the weather belongs in an episode! I was hoping, at best, it would sort of come off as sounding like a conversation they might have, at its barest bones.
Lol, glad you liked the Chavez line! I was thinking about how funny it was, between LDABBT and Yips, where in LDABBT Gus is insistent Lassie could be guilty and in Yips where he's trying to convince Shawn to give Lassie his due for shooting Petrovich. Gus is another character I find it's been a challenge to learn how to write, but I think I'm getting better. :)
Love that you pointed out those paragraphs of Emil's observations—for someone supposedly as smart and organized as Emil, he also seems to be in denial and is more than content to accept the "surface" view, even if it seems to clash with anything he might have experienced in the past, via crimes or whatnot. I also hoped to convey the sense that poor Lassiter, who's not quite in to playing the part of Shawn, is going to have get over that sooner or later while still being the detective he is.
Thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you for sharing all your awesome insights and giving what I've written new depth and new angles of perspective. I'm so happy you "love this story like a triple layer chocolate cake with double frosting!"!!!! That's—WOW. I feel so blessed to have you reading and sharing your awesomeness. And *MAJOR SUPER BLUSHING and GRINNING and OMG*—I am a favorite of YOURS?! *hyperventilating* I don't know if I can thank you enough, but I will keep trying. :D THANK YOU!!!! <3
Date: August 15, 2012 8:27 pm Title: Chapter 1: I'm Just An Animal And Cannot Explain A Life
Yaaaayyy!!!! You updated. Took me too long to get around to reading your update. hah. I really love your writing. and I love this plot. When you first posted this story, I read it and then I moved on and read other things while I was waiting for you to update this. And its really weird because the hole week or so of me waiting for this update I just kept remembering this one line,
The man before him had no odor that Lassiter could discern, not one of sweat or other natural body odor or of cologne.
Its so weird! I just keep thinking about that line!!! haha. Anyway, other then that weirdness. I love this story. KEEP IT UUUPPPP!!!! WOO...
Thank you so much for your review and support! :D So happy having you as a reader enjoying the plot and the writing in itself! :D *IMMENSE BLUSHING* :D I love that a line that struck you as kind of peculiar stuck with you as you waited for the next chapter. :)
Thanks again!!! *crosses fingers* Will work towards an update sometime this week. :D
Date: August 02, 2012 12:56 am Title: Chapter 1: I'm Just An Animal And Cannot Explain A Life
please keep writing this story. I love your other fanfics, and think that this one will also be excellent. It is not often that Lassie gets mistaken for Shawn ( nor are there enough quality Lassiter fics out and about), so this should make for a compelling read.
Thank you so much for all your love for my fics!!!! :D So happy to have you interested in this new one too. :D Next chapter is coming soon. Definitely stick around psychfic to get a good Lassiter story fix—there are many authors here who feature (and adore) him in stories. Thanks again, so happy you are here! :D
Date: July 31, 2012 6:40 am Title: Chapter 1: I'm Just An Animal And Cannot Explain A Life
I love this whole storyline concept you have created. I was very curious to see how Lassie was going to inform the man that he wasn't Spencer--but then he didn't--which opens up a whole other can of possibilities. I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter and see which path is taken and how this all unfolds. A fascinating storyline that is playing out wonderfully in my mind as I read.
Thanks for your wonderful review! Keep holding onto that curiosity—Lassiter will be (minor spoiler) in an argumentative mood next chapter; the only reason there was no dialogue between them in this chapter was that poor Lassiter was fighting his way back to consciousness, and then after that, fighting to make sense of what had happened and what he was facing. But he will also be somewhat cautious (unless his anger gets the better of him) when he starts talking with Emil. Thank you, I love hearing your feedback and getting inspired by it too. :D Next chapter is coming soon, thanks again! :D