Date: August 02, 2017 5:47 am Title: Chapter 1
Sorry for the double review but I forgit to leave a rating!
I still adore this story!
Date: July 30, 2017 12:35 am Title: Chapter 1
This actually is one of the most delightful and warm fuzzy "Shawn gets shot" stories I've ever read, hahahaha!!! First off I just love the description of Shawn getting hit - how everything slows down - the way he wobbles and sorta just crouches down rather than flying backward. THAT not only makes it way realistic it also makes it WAY interesting! It was amazingly enjoyable reading through that sequence! I mean, to be clear, ALL of this was amazingly enjoyable!!
Then, having Henry show up with some daddy comfort - GUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUH!! Everything about that was perfection!!! Like, it made an already fantastic fic into perfect gooey whumpy goodness!!!
Author's Response: LOL! I think that's the first time I've ever heard a "Shawn gets shot" story called delightful and warm fuzzy. Hahahaha I didn't intend for that to happen, but apparently I achieved a feat without even planning for it. :P And yay! I'm really glad you liked how I paced it. Thank you for taking the time to let me know how much so; I always love reading reviews. :)
Date: July 22, 2017 11:14 am Title: Chapter 1
Deeeeej! I love this. You are such a fantastic writer and I always look forward to reading one of your fics.
I really like the way you slowed down the moment of impact and gave us a glimpse inside Shawn's thought as he was hit with the bullet. It really pulled me in and really helped me imagine the scene as if it were playing across my TV. Then kind of hitting the play button and letting us see it in normal speed is genious.
"It was an instinctive response, as much an attempt to quell the pain as it was a little voice in the back of his head reminding him that he probably should try to keep as much blood as possible inside his body." - I don't know why this made me laugh, that probably wasn't the intention, but it's just so Shawn. Honestly, you're characterization is spot it!
"Shawn grinned. “A little bit of this,” he winked, “and a whole lot of that,” he added with a wiggle of his fingers." - OOHH MY GOODNESSS. I just loved this! And having it as the ending is just too perfect.
Author's Response: Hehehehehe I got so excited to see your review! And yay! Thank you for your kind words. :D I'm glad to hear that you liked it so much! I can't take credit for all of the lines, as I straight up jacked them from the episode's script (but hey, it's an alternate ending so I figured that was fair) but I did tweak the way they were conveyed and the events surrounding them, so that works, right? ;) (Also, yes, it made me laugh too, so we're in the same boat. LOL) Thank you again for taking the time to review! You made my day!