Date: June 23, 2020 9:19 pm Title: Heatwave
Ooh, very awesome use of descriptions! Definitely hooked me and drew me in. Created such a vivid and uncomfortable atmosphere, I felt so bad for her. I like how it starts so dramatically and then builds to the moment where it's revealed what's actually happening.
Date: June 22, 2020 1:29 am Title: Heatwave
I like the way you played with the descriptions. The intensity builds up well through those compounding details for a really nice effect.
For a second there, I thought she was burning alive, so finding out that it was a fever was a really good "aha!" moment for me. :-D
Date: May 02, 2020 7:48 pm Title: Who Are You?
Oh, wow, that was good! I liked the little roller coaster of emotions from sad, to relieved, to "oh my gosh, you can't end it there!" This is so good and I really enjoyed it. Can't wait to see what you do for the next prompt. :)
Date: April 27, 2020 11:46 am Title: Sound of Silence II
Ugh, this one hurt to read. I forgot how emotional this episode was (now I've gotta go back and watch it again, lol). You did such an awesome job of exploring Shawn's thoughts/feelings in this scene, and with such a small word count, that's REALLY impressive. Those final lines are especially heartbreaking. Such a good one-shot. I love it!