Penname: whirlgirl [Contact] Real name: Kat
Member Since: April 24, 2012
Membership status: Member
Bio:
Heya, this is whirlgirl. I've finally decided to put something in this nifty little bio section that could give you some more information about me. Well, for one, I'm a huge Psych fan (not that you wouldn't have been able to guess that fact... :-) I think the fact that I'm registered on a fanfiction website and am actually writing stories for the fandom could have easily tipped you off on that one.)

Unfortunately, the only problem with being a Psych-o is the 80s referencing. While I grew up watching MacGuyver, Knight Rider and The Wonder Years, I'm not a child of the 80s. Therefore, a lot of references escape me when I watch the show. When I can, I'm going to rent out a bunch of 80s shows and movies and am going to watch the series for a third time so I can watch the series like I'm supposed to.

I have seen every episode more than once and I am proud of that somewhat geeky fact. Some episodes I've watched a few times. Eg. The Yang trilogy, Shawn takes a shot in the dark, Last night Gus, Lassie did a bad, bad thing, Disco wasn't killed, it was murdered and obviously the Pilot episode.

Some of my favourite scenes are: (I won't tell you where they are, if you're a fan you should be able to guess.)

* When Shawn its strapped to a bed in the mental hospital and they really think he's crazy.

* Shawn's Lenny impression when he has the door shut in his face. (Makes me glad that I've seen Of Mice and Men)

* The hats scene. I mean honestly, this one is integral to understanding Shawn as a character. There's a lot of interesting show dynamics surrounding this. One example of this would be Henry's relationship with his son.

* I also admit that Shawn jumping onto Lassie's car and shooting while injured was a big highlight for me. I love whump.

* Shawn learning from his Mother the true reason why she left. I love how Henry cutely waves at them afterwards.

* Shawn and Gus' final performance of 'Shout'.

And finally, even though there are many more scenes I enjoy...

* Shawn going boneless so Gus can't get him to leave his workplace. That was hilarious!

Anyway, that's all folks!

Whirlgirl signing out.

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Desk by ZedPM Rated: eT starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 11]
Summary: Sometimes there's nothing more a man can do then hide under his desk.
Categories: Season
Characters: Lassiter
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1791 Read Count: 1107
[Report This] Published: October 11, 2010 Updated: October 11, 2010
Reviewer: whirlgirl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 07, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really like how everything tied in at the end. The thought of Lassiter and Shawn squished under his desk was entertaining.

My constructive crit: Shawn seems to realise Lassie's hiding from his Mom after already saying 'About what? How to hide from you Mom'

Your characterisation was spot on. I could imagine this happening in the show.

Summary: Not long after "Yang 3 in 2D" Shawn is relaxing outside the office when he strikes up a conversation with a pretty young redhead
Categories: Post-season, Crossover
Characters: Buzz, Gus, Henry, Juliet, Karen, Lassiter, Shawn
Genres: Casefile
Warnings: None
Series: Time Enough
Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 13595 Read Count: 10526
[Report This] Published: April 07, 2011 Updated: July 23, 2011
Reviewer: whirlgirl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 30, 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Woah, really enjoyed this story. Haven't watched Torchwood yet but knew enough about it to understand the references you were making. This was really entertaining and I thought the interactions between the characters from each show were integrated very naturally together.

My constructive criticism: I did feel that Lassie and Jules were a bit too accepting of things.

Otherwise, everything else was spot on. Especially the scene with the wrap-up. I could so imagine everyone interrupting Shawn's wrap-up and him getting frustrated.

Loved it. :)

Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, they probably were a bit too accepting. Maybe I'll touch on that in a later story.

Summary: Tag to the Yin/Yang Trilogy. Shawn struggles with what happened and has some doubts about Psych.

Major spoilers for the Yin/Yang Trilogy.
Categories: Season
Characters: Abigail Lytar, Gus, Juliet, Lassiter, Mary, Mr. Yang, Mr. Yin, Shawn
Genres: General
Warnings: Graphic Violence, Major Spoilers
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3480 Read Count: 687
[Report This] Published: February 05, 2012 Updated: February 05, 2012
Reviewer: whirlgirl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 30, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I'm really impressed with the banter between Gus and Shawn. The way Shawn evades Gus' questions is so in character that I can imagine this happening in the series.

My constructive criticism: (I don't actually have anything to critique for this. I did spot one tense mistake but it wasn't blatantly obvious.)

Your characterisation was spot on for me. Even though Shawn was distressed he still seemed in character. Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! And thanks for the constructive crit, it was my first time writing in present tense and I kept finding myself going back to past, so it was a little difficult.  Once again, thank you!

Summary: Leave it to Lassiter to actually investigate one of Shawn's wild goose chases. Although, this goose doesn't seem to be wild after all.

Whumpathon Entry.
Categories: Season
Characters: Lassiter, Shawn
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 7441 Read Count: 2029
[Report This] Published: February 25, 2012 Updated: June 21, 2012
Reviewer: whirlgirl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 22, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Awesome start to the fic. You waste no time in getting to the action! Lassie and Shawn trapped in a refrigerated truck spells win. :-)

My constructive criticism: I don't see how the light not being on when the door is shut is a pun. It is a funny joke though.

I like your characterisation. I think its spot on! Your dialogue reflects this. I think its the strongest part of your writing.

Reviewer: whirlgirl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 22, 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

I'm really enjoying the whump in this. Nothing seems to be going right for Shawn. Even Lassiter's bumped his head couple of times! :-)

My constructive criticism: I can't see how such a short fall can result in a broken arm despite the fact that they were awkwardly cuffed. I could be wrong so I'll just suspend my disbelief because I like whump.

I love the conflict of emotions in the happy-go-lucky Shawn. He somehow manages to turn a negative statement about him dying into a joke about his hair. That was genius.

No Place To Hide by Kirei Rated: T starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 36]
Summary: A murder at Central Coast Pharmaceuticals brings the gang together to catch a killer lurking among its many employees. But what if there's more than one?

Written for the Whumping With Tropes Contest. Spoilers for... Ghosts and Let's Doo Wop It Again. Maybe more. And it takes place mid season 6 so there's established Shules.
Categories: Season
Characters: Gus, Henry, Juliet, Lassiter, Shawn
Genres: Drama, Hurt/Comfort, Mystery
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 36592 Read Count: 6905
[Report This] Published: March 18, 2012 Updated: October 28, 2012
Reviewer: whirlgirl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 08, 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

At first, I thought the trope that you were going fo use was the freezer one. Then I thought it was going to be the bathroom... After that, I laughed outright when I realised you were going to use all of them. :-)

My concrit: I could be horribly wrong but couldn't Gus travel on top of the conveyer belt instead of next to it? That might buy him some time and he won't get hanged in the process.

I love how you can weave in references. It makes everything feel like it could legitimately be an episo of psych. I can't wait for more!

Author's Response: You'll have to see what happens to Gus - maybe he'll figure out the obvious. Maybe not. But right now I'm working on my resume for a potential promotion at work, so that's taking up my time when I'd rather to be writing Psych fic! I'm working on it tho.

Summary:  

“That man... nearly murdered my son and his best friend. He may still succeed with one of them. You don't need to tell me about doing the job, Karen, but don't try to tell me you're doing everything you can.”

 

Entry for the 2012 Whumpathon

 


Categories: Season
Characters: Gus, Henry, Shawn
Genres: Angst, Drama, Hurt/Comfort
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 14384 Read Count: 8768
[Report This] Published: April 08, 2012 Updated: August 31, 2012
Reviewer: whirlgirl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 29, 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Nothing Spared

Wow, you are really talented. How do you write action scenes so well? Great tension; it definitely had me gripped. I can't wait to find out what happens next.

Normally I stick some constructive criticism in a review but I honestly couldn't find anything for this chapter so I'll take the whole fic into account.

My constructive criticism: The location wasn't as clearly specified as I would have liked in the first chapter. I kind of had to piece it together with the clues you gave me. (files, desk then later bullpen and the mention of their guard)

Overall, I'm enthralled with this fic.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! And thank you for the addition of a critique - though in this case the unspecified location was an intentional move, so I guess I succeeded lol! I've started work on the next chapter and I'm really hoping it won't take long to have it posted.  I'm so glad you're liking this!

Reviewer: whirlgirl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 20, 2012 Title: Chapter 5: All Hours

I like how, despite the seriousness of it all, you've added some comic tension. I especially like the line Henry says about 'mooning the whole place looking for Shawn'. The S.S. Mayhem bit was funny too. Was it pure coincidence that Shawn's initials match up with the boat-name parody?

This is the part of the review where I give constructive criticism. Not that I can find anything... why do you make it so hard to stick to my formula? If I have to be nit-picky, I could say that you should be careful not to overuse sentence fragments. (However, in this case, I thought it added to the atmosphere of the chapter.)

Once again, I'm envious of your writing style. The way you incorporate description slows the piece down a bit and gives it a very natural-feeling pace. It also transports me into the story which is a great thing.

Summary:

Set after Season Two.

 

"I hired his kid now it's just a matter of time before we get to the old man."

Ending the call she smirked at how naïve the man was and how much pain she was going to cause him and his father.

When Shawn takes in a private case he unknowingly opens a decade old wound that threatens to end not only his slowly mending relationship with his father but their lives as well.

NOW COMPLETE!!!


Categories: Post-season, Alternate Universe
Characters: Buzz, Gus, Henry, Juliet, Karen, Lassiter, Shawn
Genres: Angst, Drama, Hurt/Comfort
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 16 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 32843 Read Count: 9660
[Report This] Published: April 20, 2012 Updated: June 26, 2012
Reviewer: whirlgirl Signed
Date: June 22, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Finally a Case!!

Whoa, interesting start. You really had me intrigued with the whole fake case thing. Made my mind whirr in all directions. Does this brother exist? Maybe its someone unrelated to her that she wants Shawn to find?

My constructive criticism: I get that she's a good actor but the bags under her eyes? Unless she's got a real sleeping problem that's hard to fake - except on camera, that is.

Shawn and Gus' silly bantering at the beginning was really in character. The sound effects were a really cool touch. The small details like the biggest locker and the lock were hilarious additions.

Author's Response: Oh you'll see this is something that's been planned so losing some sleep to make it more believable is all in the plan.

Reviewer: whirlgirl Signed
Date: June 22, 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Bumps in the Road

I liked Shawn's interactions with Buzz in this chapter. Once again the small additions you make add to the hilariousness of the situation. Like the couch thing.

Constructive criticism: is there a particular reason that the pair allowed Shawn to know about his Dad's involvement?

Yeah, the last bit was nasty, my eyes, my eyes! Although, kudos for adding another dimension to their relationship. It adds even more intrigue to the story.

Author's Response: Shawn still kinda hated his dad at this point so he would do anything to show up the old man. So yeah and yes the ending had several people gagging and grossing out, trust me not as bad as you think.